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A类大作文中的男女平等问题

2016-06-28

来源:环球雅思杨亮

小编:环球教育 189
摘要:

文章为环球教育原创内容,转载请注明出处

16年05月,男女平等的题目再次出现在雅思写作A类大作文中。就这个话题而言,写作名师们都说并不陌生,毕竟在写作的历史题库中经常出现。而且每次出现题目都基本没有太多的变化。但是对于考生而言,这个话题可能就不会像就业类,教育类那么地被熟知了。毕竟此类话题大概是以每年一个的概率考到。因此,也就没能得到考生们的足够重视。

今年05月19号的考试中关于女性参军的话题,再次重出江湖。其实,在历史题库中,这已经是第N次了。

In many countries, women now are able to join the armed forces on equal basis with men; however, some people feel that only men should be members of the army, navy or air force. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

相信就本题而言,绝大部分考生肯定是要赞同女性可以参军的。而且这样的行文逻辑也比较简单,条例也会更加清晰。事实上,从一个反面的观点切入此题也不是不可能。只是在逻辑方面需要考生做的天衣无缝,思路缜密,论述周全。咱们一同研究一下下文给出的论证逻辑。

开头段:

Wars, the most inhumane activities having killed billions of people in the history, are always thought to be severely cruel to humans, consequently leading to the controversy whether females with emotional and physical vulnerableness should be kept away from wars, and namely whether they are suitable for serving as soldiers or not.

很常规的开头段,通过延展性的背景介绍来引出本文想讨论的题目。写法中规中矩。

主段一:

It is widely accepted that the ideology of sexual equality should be diffused in our society, and authorities should try their best to eliminate sexual discrimination via offering fairness for females to take jobs in all walks of life. By analogy, joining in the army is the basic right that females should deserve. This essay, certainly, will not deny the right that women have, but will prove that females’ waiving this right is strongly recommended.

这段的逻辑就是,本文强调女性有参军的权利,但是行使这个权利是不被推荐的。 本段最后一句其实起到一个承上启下的作用。成功地引出了下文。

主段二:

As a common morality, taking care of females and children belonging to disadvantaged group in our society is being taught to everyone especially males. As mentioned, wars are extremely cruel, meaning that serving for the army implies putting people in great hazard. Obviously, in contemporary society, people have no excuse to put women in such dangerous situation who originally deserve fine care and protection from the public.

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主段二的论证逻辑就是回应上文,论述为什么不建议女性去参军。保护女性,照顾弱势群体是我们从小就被教育的道理。我们根本没有必要将女性至于危险当中,因此建议女性参军也是非常没有必要的。

主段三:

Furthermore, females joining the army will unavoidably increase difficulty and cost of the army’s management. Regulations and rules for protecting female soldiers from sexual harassment are seriously required. Besides, for providing equal circumstance for females building up more basic facilities like woman’s showering center and rest rooms immediately enhances cost of investment from governments. Most of military equipments are designed for male users and women’s specific design is consequently needed.

本段重点强调不建议女性参军的第二个原因,既女性参军后的确会给部队的建设以及管理增加难度。

结尾段

To sum up, there is no one who can deny the right that females have to choose to serve for the army, and every citizen should show enough respect to this right. Nevertheless, unless women have to, they are not advised to be members of the army as offering females a comfortable life is the prime task of civilized societies.

结尾部分,再次重点强调女性着实有参军的权利。只不过,除非万不得已,否则在现在这个社会我们完全没有必要建议女性去参军。

这样一个逻辑,相信不会得到太多考生的认同。但是,从行文的角度来讲,还是比较完整的一个逻辑框架。其实,大作文的写作并不是让考官全盘接受考生的观点,而是让考官接受考生的论证逻辑而已。

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