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小编:Jennifer 270雅思写作分为大作文和小作文,虽然大作文用时和分数两者对比,大部分的精力很多同学在备考时都会花在大作文上。但是小作文在雅思写作中也是很重要的一项,能够更好更快的完成雅思小作文。想要得到雅思7+的同学,千万不可以小觑小作文存在。
雅思7+小作文因为虽然它只占到写作总分的三分之一,但是由于它句型词汇较为固定,思路简单,更加容易掌握。这就给短期要提分的同学带来了很大的优势。
来看一个剑桥系列7当中的一到例题
The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
这道题目可以说是比较有代表性的变化趋势图,考官的作文句型工整,思路清晰,很具有借鉴意义。
考官范文及分析
The graph illustrates changes in the amounts of beef, lamb, chicken and fish consumed in a particular European country between 1979 and 2004.
分析:通过同义替换的方式改写作文原题,符合keep it simple and stupid。和开头就使用比较复杂的句子不同,确保雅思写作精确的重要性。
In 1979 beef was by far the most popular of these food, with about 225 grams consumed per person per week. Lamb and chicken were eaten in similar quantities(around 150 grams), while much less fish was consumed(just over 50 gram).
分析:描述过去的数据注意使用了一般过去时的写法,写出四种肉类的重要数据,用来对比和排序,说出了最受欢迎的牛肉和相对最不受欢迎的鱼肉。
However, during this 25-year period the consumption of beef and lamb fell dramatically to approximately 100 grams and 55 grams respectively. The consumption of fish also declined, but much less significantly to just below 50 grams, so although it remained the least popular food, consumption levels were the most stable.
分析:将下降的三种肉类放在一起书写能够表达更加的有逻辑性。分别描述了牛肉和羊肉的变化趋势,然后再用数据进行补充。先概括,再具体。后面的鱼肉也是用了相同的思路进行书写。
The consumption of chicken, on the other hand, showed an upward trend, overtaking that of lamb in 1980 and that of beef in 1989. By 2004 it had soared to almost 250 grams per person per week.
分析:开始描述唯一呈上升趋势的鸡肉。在描述的过程中很好地做到了“抓点”。具体描述了中间和牛肉以及羔羊肉的交点,以及最后的终点数据。通过上面的分析告诉广大考生写数据类的作文不要盲目写很多无关紧要的数据。
Overall, the graph shows how the consumption of chicken increased dramatically while the popularity of these other foods decreased over the period.
分析:最后一段进行总的概括。小作文的总结段还是很重要的,考生既可以将它写作在首段之后,也可以写在最后一段。注意要从总体出发,观察四种肉类之间对比,最后得出结论:鸡肉越来越受欢迎,消费量上升,但是其他三种肉类呈下降趋势。
想要写好雅思小作文,事情表达的逻辑性需要进行长期的锻炼,就能够比较有效的掌握小作文的得分点。更多雅思考试备考技巧可以关注环球教育雅思考试频道。