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摘要：
题目：
Students at universities often have a choice of places to live. They may choose to live in university dormitories, or they may choose to live in apartments in the community. Compare the advantages of living in university housing with the advantages of living in an apartment in the community. Where would you prefer to live? Give reasons for your preference.
例文评论：一、文章类型：观点选择型。
二、语言运用。
1．句（8）
普通：When living in an apartment, you have the choice of who your roommate is, or whether you even have a roommate at all. 优秀：When living in an apartment, we can either choose who our roommates are, or whether we even have roommates. 评论：学会使用动词。另外choice of后面适宜接名词而不是一个从句。2．结尾段。
注意这里由于是结论，应该尽量清楚，而不要再多加论点。也不要出现of course这样的短语。三、常见错误及误区
1．注意举例的时候切忌用you，一定要用we. 2．Quiet 本身就可以做名词，不要写成quietness，这是中国学生比较容易犯的错误。 3．像for the purpose of这样的短语最好可以缩略成for，以示简洁。 4．Be of与名词相接构成的短语可以改变只用形容词的单一情况，但要记住不是每个名词都可以这样使用的。Be of attraction就是不怎么合适的。 5．Hang around这样的带有贬义的短语一定要在适宜的时候使用，这一点我们在前面提到过。
